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The Burning Heart: Part 0

As she was sleeping she dreamed again of her fragmented past. but this time was different. opening her eyes she saw that she was in her old bed room.

Something seemed, wrong she could smell smoke in her room and seeing that it was coming from under her door leading to the hallway. she walked to the door and opened it, she was greeted by a wall of smoke and flame.

She ran out of the hallway as fast as she could and was yelling "Master, where are you?" "Master!" she made it to the stairs. just before she went down them. She heard her master call out to her from downstairs. "Rose!" "Where are you Rose?"

She ran down the stairs and made a left to the kitchen and saw him. "Master!" She yelled to him, he turned around and saw her "Rose, there you are." He ran to her then quickly hugged her and said "we need to get out of here."

Just as they were heading to the back door that led to the backyard. part of the ceiling started to collapse above them. Rose's Master pushed her forward just as the ceiling started to break apart and fall.

Rose quickly got back on her feet and turned around to see that her master was now buried under burning debris "Master!!!" she screamed.

Suddenly a bright light was illuminating her body, a few seconds later. the light fading to reveal a surprise Rose. she had evolved into a Gardevoir without meaning to.

At the moment though she didn't care, ran to the burning debris and started digging hastily for her master. the flames were surrounding her and the smoke was making it hard for her to breath.

She felt like she was being cooked alive in the house but she kept digging. she was able to uncover his right hand and his head. Her master move his head to looked up at her and asked "Rose, is that you?"

She nodded her head, she was still trying to dig him out. she was able to uncover his other hand. the only thing that was pinning him down was four heavy 5 x 4 boards.

She tried lifting them, but they would not move an inch. "Leave me" Rose looked down at her master "there's nothing more you can do for me, Rose"

*there was an enormous noise's of cracking and popping wood. The house was only going to stand for a few more minutes before it would collapse on them*

"Leave Rose, it's too late for me, but you can still make it out." she could feel cold tears running down her face. she couldn't abandon him, she shook her head and still tried to get him out from under the burning boards.

*The noise of crackling and popping wood was getting louder.* Rose's master reached into his belt and pulled out his small dagger. he used as a garden tool then offered it to her. "Take this, to remember me."

Rose shook her head still tried to get him out from under the burning boards. "Rose!" Her master said in a stern voice Rose stopped and looked at him "please take this, and get out of here."

He still held the dagger out to her but his hand was slowly started to get lower. Rose grabbed his hand, looking into her eyes he smiled to her and said "it's…too late….for me…r-run…Rose."

His eyes started to close, his heart stopped completely. Rose grabbed onto the dagger and obeyed his last command. she ran to the back door, just as she get to the back yard the whole house collapsed 2 seconds later.

But she didn't stop, she just kept running and running until she collapsed on the ground from exhaustion. she looked around and saw that she was now in the forest.

She didn't care, she curled herself into a ball and started crying for what happened to her, crying for the death of her master, and crying for not being able to do anything to save her master.

"I wish I was dead." she said aloud "why couldn't I die with him?" "Why did I survive and he didn't?" She curled herself into a tighter ball and Cried herself to sleep..=}
The Burning Heart Link's to Part's 1 [link] 2 [link] 3 [link] 4 [link] 5 [link] 6 [link]

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If there are any errors or grammar problems please let me know. and don't feel afraid to point them out.

It helps me to be a better writer if I can fix them for you the readers to enjoy the story.

Until the next chapter of this story my friends, stay frosty...=}
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:iconmetagrossfreak:
Metagrossfreak Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Great way to start a story :)
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bassmegapokemonlover Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Professional Artist
Thank you I try to please...=}
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GentalmanBoxer Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013
..... *starts to cry manly tear* Damn it! Y u make me cry!
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cppietime Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Erm... Gardevoir/Kirlia learns the move Teleport...
Forgetful Pokemon?
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bassmegapokemonlover Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Professional Artist
Actually you bring up a really good question, the reason because she didn't use that was because she Couldn't use teleport for she had only a little bit of psychic powers at this time, and was never able to fully use her psychic abilities because no one ever teach her how to use them in the first place at least in this point in time...=}

PS:I hope you enjoy the rest of my story so far that I have written...=}
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Whites-Knight Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
poor girl...
nice start though
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bassmegapokemonlover Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2012  Professional Artist
I no. T_T thx you...=}
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Whites-Knight Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
*nods* yep, no problem
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SympathyBMW Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
wow. 1 word...

sad. im sorry but it is.

but just because its sad, doesnt mean its not good
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bassmegapokemonlover Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Professional Artist
I know it was supposed to be really sad, but that doesn't mean that I wasn't feeling the exact same way as you do, thank you for the compliment to...=}
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SympathyBMW Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome.
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SilentShyGuy Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2010  Hobbyist
:cries:
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karlarei2003 Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
:iconsadplz:

But your writing has improved so much! I was so excited reading it. Any mistakes I see are small and will be really easy for you to fix.

You should be really proud of yourself; I know I am!
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bassmegapokemonlover Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2010  Professional Artist
*Pat's you on the head* it's thanks to your teachings, grammar sensei..=}
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karlarei2003 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
You have learned well, grasshopper.
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sombersunshine Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're really close to getting there, but remember that learning takes time, and patience is a virtue.

It was easy to picture what was going on.
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bassmegapokemonlover Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2010  Professional Artist
thank you very much for the comment..=}
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Overboarded2 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2010
Yes, I would LOVE to see more of this...
Try to write it than draw it, takes less time to feed us, readers :B
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silvermoon551 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
that's a sad story... ^_^
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bassmegapokemonlover Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2010  Professional Artist
Thank you I work hard on it. Is the grammar okay?..=}
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silvermoon551 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
well, there are a few minor quips. Instead of "Master are you okay?" it's better to put "Master, are you okay?"

there's the same kind of error in "there's nothing more you can do for me Rose" : there needs to be a comma before "Rose".
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bassmegapokemonlover Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2010  Professional Artist
thank you for the tips it is very much appreciate..=}
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silvermoon551 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
oh, and for the part where the master says one word at a time, it's better to use periods than commas. it emphasizes the pause between the words more accurately.
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bassmegapokemonlover Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2010  Professional Artist
O_0 ? I did not no that, again thank you for the tips it is very, Very much appreciate..=}

....is there anymore errors in this story?..T_T..=}
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silvermoon551 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
not that I can really see... maybe a few minor things, but it's probably more of your style, and I'm not going to call you out on it.
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bassmegapokemonlover Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2010  Professional Artist
I appreciate it and I also hope you enjoy the next stories that I'm going to upload on DA in a few days.

Again I appreciate your truthfulness it helps me to improve my grammar, I'm still not got the hang of it yet even two years of study it, and by study I mean reading both Fan fiction and written books as well.

Speaking of which have you ever read the books that are written by Christopher Paolini like Eragon, Eldest, or Brisingr? They are so cool..=}
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